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The diagram belows shows how a solar powered water pumps works.summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram belows shows how a solar powered water pumps works.summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
#belows #water #pumps #works #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The given diagram
describe
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describes
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 information on how a
solar powered
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solar-powered
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water
 pump is used to supply
water
 for a village. There are three main components to the system a solar panel, an underground bore or well with a
water
 pump inside it
,
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apply
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 and a tank for holding the
water
 after it has
pumped
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been pumped
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 up from the underground source. The first process
is involves
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involves
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 collecting sunlight to
power
 the pump.
A solar
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Solar
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 panel photovoltaic cells store sunlight and collect it. DC electricity is collecting solar energy when the
penel
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panel
 is exposed to sunlight.
This
 DC
power
 travels from
from
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apply
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penel
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panel
 to
power
 a
water
 pump,which
work
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works
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 at
underground
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an underground
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 bore or well. DC
power
 is used to transfer
water
 with
bore
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a bore
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 pump.
Then
water
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the water
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 goes
in
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into
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water
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the water
a water
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 tank and after
it
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,it
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process
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processed
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water
 runs to
village
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the village
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 ,where it provides fresh
water
 to the residents.
Overall
, the process showed that the
water
 is clean as week as pure provide to village
resident
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residents
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 which was clean by Solar powered
water
 pumps.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • solar powered
  • water pump
  • components
  • solar panel
  • inverters
  • battery
  • controller
  • electricity
  • efficient
  • environmentally friendly
  • renewable energy
  • traditional
  • fuel-powered
  • comparison
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
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