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With The Increasing Use And Development Of New Technology, Many Machine Are New Able To Do The Work Which People Used To Perform. What Are The Advantages And Disadvantages Of This Trend ?

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Electronic devices are now dramatically developed and widely used.
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, a lot of
work
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 which was once done by human is now performed by machines.
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 trend is bringing us not only advantages but disadvantages
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. Never before has human's
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 done by modern techniques as much as it is today.
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 of all, using machines consumes less time than doing the
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 ourselves. A lot of
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such
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 as paper works in the office, medical checks in the hospital are done by electronic machines.
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, machines
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 more effectively than a human does. Machines can create or produce thousands of products that are completely the same and faster than human worker, which factories require.
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, machines are not tired or sick, they only break down after a long time being used, we just need to fix them.
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, some machines are too expensive for us to buy.
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, performing too much
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 by machines leads to bad effects. Not working for a long time, human can become lazy and no longer want to do anything. In conclusion, electronic devices, howewer, are created by human so it is possible to say human can be perfectly replaced by machines
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