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People are becoming too dependent on the Internet and phone. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 technological world, it has been seen that people become more dependent on mobile phones and
internet
 as compared to the past. It is due to the easy availability of a network and wide variety of services on mobile phone. I think it has brought both positive and negative aspects on individuals and society as a whole. On the one hand, now people are busy with their hectic schedule so they hardly get time for their daily commitments like paying bills and needs
such
 as shopping, food from a restaurant etc. By actually visiting those places.
Therefore
,
this
 advancement provides a feature like google pay, amazon and so on to accomplish their tasks with just a click.
This
 development not only make their life hassle free, but
also
 give them a wide range of varieties while making a choice at their own pace.
Furthermore
,
internet
 and mobile phone provide an opportunity to develop and enhance their skills by pursuing online courses from their home almost in every field. Overall, depending on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 has brought enormous benefits to individuals if it is used properly.
On the other hand
, many natives, especially teenagers and youngsters usually prefer to spend longer hours on
this
 gadget to relax themselves through chatting with friends, playing games and movies rather than socializing with their dear ones.
This
 type of sedentary lifestyle has an adverse impact on their health in terms of obesity, eye vision etc.
Besides
this
, when an individual become addicted to it,
then
 he is too influenced by it that he hesitate to interact with others.
As a result
, they do not only lack social and communication skills, but
also
 develop antisocial behaviour in them. In conclusion,
although
 there are immense benefits of
internet
. It has made our life so easy that people can do multi task conveniently.
However
, the impact of its extreme usage can not be denied. It is suggested that it should be monitored properly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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