schoolshould stop using books for teaching to learn as they find them bring.and use film tv and computer instead. to what extent do you agree.

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these days many schools provide to teach by
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that teaching by watching multimedia tools is
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they believe that children can learn much easier. . I partially agree both
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can help them to study for
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Firstly
, traditional teaching has a better learning environmental teaching system for
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. all
student
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because it is basic learning to complete knowledge and it’s a good source of
information
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and understanding deeply and the other reason it has amount of data which can help pupils boost their performance . for
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, you can highlight the page of that book and ask your teacher or you can go to
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it
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some
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school
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provide lecture
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and games,
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films
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instead
of
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with new methods.
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, it is
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to carry out your device
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everywhere when you don’t access your
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so it is a good way to manage your time as example if have a lot of homework you don’t need to search
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books
Instead
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