he environment problem facing today's world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. Government and large companies should responsible for the deducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays it is hard to catch up with technology and development. Young people
develop
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Develop
too fast today and it is hard for parents to catch up. Personally, I agree
with
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With
the statement that today young people make their own decisions and do not
depend
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Depend
on their parents as it was in the past. I feel that way for two reasons
which
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Which
I will explore in my essay.
To begin
with, due to developed technologies and smart gadgets adolescent are
way
how something is done or how it happens
Way
too advanced. Young people are able to solve problems more easily than
their
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they're
parents
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Parents
.
As a result
, they become more independent and open-minded from a
very
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Very
young age. The advent of the Internet made a huge gap between generations
and
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And
seized opportunity for youth to solve their problems on their own. For
example
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Example
, when I was in University my parents decided what I should study, where
and
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And
how. They went with me to apply for classes, to meet
councilors
a member of a council
councillors
and to
decide
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Decide
what would be more beneficial for me. In contrary, nowadays, my
seventeen
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Seventeen
years old son made his own decisions about his major and did
everything
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Everything
by himself. Everything was done on-line and he never needed
my
objective form of "I"
me
mine
assistance
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Assistance
or help.
Secondly
, our children learn in school how to be free and independent from the
very
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Very
young age. They are allowed to
made
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make
their own decisions and be responsible
for
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For
mistakes they have done.
For instance
, my 20
years
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year
old nephew decided to
rent
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Rent
an apartment and
live
go away from a place
leave
alone without his parents. At
first
his parents got
surprised
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Surprised
and were very upset about his decision.
However
, they felt that he was
mature
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Mature
enough to manage his life and was totally able to take care about himself.
As a result
, his relationship with parents became much better, he had more time
to
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To
study and relax in the way he wanted. In contrary, 10 years ago when I was
young
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
Young
I couldn't
had
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have
even
imagine
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imagined
to live alone and be able to live without
parental
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Parental
custody. Overall, I think that nowadays young people are more independent and free than
in
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In
the past.
That is
because technology is accessible from the very young ages and
it
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It
helps them to become more free from parent's control and become more
freethinking
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Freethinking
.
Also
, youth learn how to become adult from school and be ready for
life
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Life
and be responsible for making their own decisions.

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