he environment problem facing today's world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. Government and large companies should responsible for the deducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays it is hard to catch up with technology and development. Young people
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Develop
develop
too fast today and it is hard for parents to catch up. Personally, I agree
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With
with
the statement that today young people make their own decisions and do not
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Depend
depend
on their parents as it was in the past. I feel that way for two reasons
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Which
which
I will explore in my essay.
To begin
with, due to developed technologies and smart gadgets adolescent are
how something is done or how it happens
Way
way
too advanced. Young people are able to solve problems more easily than
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they're
their
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Parents
parents
.
As a result
, they become more independent and open-minded from a
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Very
very
young age. The advent of the Internet made a huge gap between generations
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And
and
seized opportunity for youth to solve their problems on their own. For
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Example
example
, when I was in University my parents decided what I should study, where
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And
and
how. They went with me to apply for classes, to meet
a member of a council
councillors
councilors
and to
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Decide
decide
what would be more beneficial for me. In contrary, nowadays, my
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Seventeen
seventeen
years old son made his own decisions about his major and did
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Everything
everything
by himself. Everything was done on-line and he never needed
objective form of "I"
me
mine
my
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Assistance
assistance
or help.
Secondly
, our children learn in school how to be free and independent from the
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Very
very
young age. They are allowed to
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make
made
their own decisions and be responsible
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For
for
mistakes they have done.
For instance
, my 20
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year
years
old nephew decided to
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Rent
rent
an apartment and
go away from a place
leave
live
alone without his parents. At
first
his parents got
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Surprised
surprised
and were very upset about his decision.
However
, they felt that he was
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Mature
mature
enough to manage his life and was totally able to take care about himself.
As a result
, his relationship with parents became much better, he had more time
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To
to
study and relax in the way he wanted. In contrary, 10 years ago when I was
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
Young
young
I couldn't
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have
had
even
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imagined
imagine
to live alone and be able to live without
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Parental
parental
custody. Overall, I think that nowadays young people are more independent and free than
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In
in
the past.
That is
because technology is accessible from the very young ages and
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It
it
helps them to become more free from parent's control and become more
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Freethinking
freethinking
.
Also
, youth learn how to become adult from school and be ready for
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Life
life
and be responsible for making their own decisions.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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