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Some people think that city governments should spend more money to promote bicycle use in cities. Other, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transportation system like trains or buses. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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In
this
 day and age, travelling around the world is not just a dream because of the invention of
transportation
.
Although
 we can go anywhere and anytime by using convenient
transportation
, it brings severe effects that are harmful to the
environment
 and consumption of natural resources.
Hence
, some people support that governments should promote the
use
 of bicycle while others believe that investing
on
Suggestion
in
 public
transportation
 systems is the best way to solve the problem.
First
 of all, public
transport
 allows many people to travel in just one vehicle, which helps reduce traffic congestion in city centres. According to the reports, the total CO2 emissions from buses (15%) was three times lower than the private cars. It is obvious that there are environmental benefits of most of the people using one vehicle in the form of a reduction in the consumption of fossil fuels.
In addition
, some public
transport
such
 as subways, are highly energy efficient or
use
 sustainable energy which is greatly reduced the destruction towards the
environment
. From another perspective, bicycles can solve the problem that public
transport
 can't handle it, which is offering flexible routes. We always face some troubles when we
use
 the public
transport
such
 as buses are not catered for many
destination
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destinations
 and the punctuality of buses or trains is frequently unreliable.
Furthermore
, we will not be restricted by other passengers as bicycles can be deemed the personal
transport
. If we
use
 the bicycles, we can avoid the peak hours and will not feel unpleasant due to the overcrowding. In conclusion, we have the responsibilities to protect our
environment
, either using bicycle or riding public
transportation
 is less harmful to the
environment
. In order to live in healthy and clean cities, we must practice the
carpooling
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cabling
coupling
cooling
 as soon as possible.
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