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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Agree or disagree.

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In todays' world, everyone is busy with their work.
Time
 is precious and we can't' get it back.
Moreover
, humans give more prominence to
time
 and
money
. Certain individuals believe that spending huge
money
 on travelling by own vehicles is significant.
On the contrary
, some masses opine to public
transport
 like bus and
train
. According to me, I undoubtedly disagree with
this
 because it is not an appropriate to spend vast
money
 on
transport
 every
time
. The following subsequent paragraphs will give a better insight into
this
 topic. Owing a own vehicle and travelling on our own can save lots of
time
. One can feel free while travelling in the own car, when compared to bus and
train
.
Although
 it has some freedom, it costs more when compared to public
transport
.
For example
, my father saves his
time
 by taking private
transport
, but the majority of his expenses are spent for his car fuel and maintenance.
Moreover
, travelling by own vehicle has an abundance of benefits. On the other side, public
transport
 saves a huge amount of
money
.
Although
 it costs less, it kills lots of
time
 in
this
 process.
Moreover
, it is essential to stay near the bus stations and railway stations. Pollution can be controlled to some extent, by reducing the usage of less fuel. It minimises the expenses so that, a part of society opine to travel by bus and
train
.
For example
, my uncle has two cars and a bike, but still he travels by bus as there is a direct bus from his home to the office. To conclude, both play significant roles in different situations. It is entirely based on the situation. If there is an urgent need like emergency case, it is preferable to use own vehicle rather than bus and
train
.
For example
, my uncle who uses public
transport
 will
also
 use his car when he runs out of
time
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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