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Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •    say why a driving licence is advantageous •    recommend a driving school •    give any extra guidance/tips   You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear John, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I was very glad to hear you are thinking about learning to drive.
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is a fantastic idea. Perhaps it might be helpful to give you some advice. Having a driving licence is incredibly advantageous. It gives you the freedom to travel wherever and whenever you want without relying on public transport or others. It
also
 opens up more job opportunities, as many employers prefer candidates who can drive. When it comes to choosing a driving school, I highly recommend ''Start School". They have a great reputation for providing thorough and patient instruction. Their instructors are friendly, professional, and very good at helping nervous beginners feel comfortable behind the wheel. A few extra tips: make sure to practice regularly between lessons, as consistency is key to building confidence.
Also
, don't rush the process—everyone learns at their own pace.
Finally
, try to schedule your test as soon as you feel ready, so you don't forget what you've learned. I look forward to hearing from you. Best wishes, Madalina.
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Your letter is well-structured and addresses all parts of the task effectively. Very good job!
coherence cohesion
For further improvement, you could vary the connectors used to link sentences and paragraphs to add a touch more sophistication.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately friendly and considerate, suitable for a letter to a friend.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, maintaining clarity and logical flow.
complete response
The letter provides a complete response, covering why a driving license is advantageous, recommending a driving school, and offering extra tips.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and encouraging, perfectly fitting the context of writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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