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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People in the developing country are not able to get good
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appens due to the lack of good
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 services related
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 of the public.The death rates of people are very high in the developing countries due to the lack organised structure of
health
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 services. In order to reduce the death rates in the country, the
government
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 has to take an action towards by introducing new schemes related to
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free medical check up camps regularly in villages and
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 insurance. In the developing countries, the
government
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 has to take initiation towards
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service
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 and bring awareness in public related to the
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 schemes in
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the health sector
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service
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 camps should be held regularly in all villages, so the old people nearby places can visit the camp to get the medicine.We can see the example of
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 come every village once in a month to give medicine to old people in nearby places. The
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also helps
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he poor people get a
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 insurance for claiming a cost of expensive
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 should have subsidies in
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 related expenses by giving the
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 related subsidies to the people, who are under below the poverty line.
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 will be useful for patient's who are suffering from cancer, heart problem and many more.For
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 of the issues, patient needs expensive
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.People under
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 category will be benefited by
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scheme
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. In wrapping up the above essay, the
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 has to take the initiative to the
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 related schemes by introducing different services for the public, including from low expensive to high expensive
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 by giving the partial or full subsidies depending up on the
treatment
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