The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The bar chart compares post-school educational attainment among
men
and women
in Australia in 1999.
As a whole, men
were ahead of women
in terms of their highest educational qualifications in Australia, and three out of five types of post-school educational qualifications, namely - post-graduate diploma
, skilled vocational diploma
and masters degree, were mostly attended by men
.
In details
, those who had a post-graduate Fix the agreement mistake
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diploma
and Master's degree were dominated by 70% and 60% men
respectively. The ratio of women
who had post-graduation qualification
was much lower. Another important aspect of the graph is that there was a remarkable number of Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
men
, 90%, who took up a 'skilled vocational diploma
course' which left women
to only just a tenth. Since men
continued their education and achieved post-graduate qualifications, females with an undergraduate diploma
much outweighed the ratio of males. Finally
, the proportion of male
whose highest education was a bachelor's degree was about 45%, Fix the agreement mistake
males
whereas
the females'
ratio was somewhat more than that.Change noun form
females
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