Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Having higher wage for professional players compared to other occupations
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any other careers, the players who has successfully professional by their profession have to achieve their professional goal. So, paying higher wages and make a big deal to value their talents
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similar issue when compare to other competitive occupations. Same as Doctors have to study and practice their career almost ten years to become professional,
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have to face so many competitions, physical training to be a successful professional one. For an example well known cricketer Muththiya Murlidaran is now coaching to the Indian national team. To become so, he played approximately twenty years showed his talent through the Sri Lankan team.
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to that, who is talking about sport professionalize is a big deal.They does not never argue about Doctors, Lawyers or Teachers’ income. Cause those are very essential career while sports become just for entertain or fashionable occupation. Even we willing to talk about eliminating the great disparity in income received by professions, image when you are doing white collar jib and would you like to earn or spend like a slave
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Taking everything into consideration successful workers are paying them according to their professional skills and they too have sacrificed to achieve that professional level. Therefor making value on their professional skill is fair for sport
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