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Some people say modern innovations brings lot of problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree?

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Inventions are a result of research which is aimed at improving the standard of life. They increase comfort and convenience. Some people argue that modern innovations have created more problems than solutions.
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, I disagree with
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 argument. I believe it is about how people use
technology
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 essay. Some people say that the nuclear bomb was the best example of the destructive power of science. They forget that the original intention of
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 research was to generate electricity from nuclear fusion.
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,
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technology
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 was misused to develop
nuclear bomb
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a nuclear bomb
nuclear bombs
the nuclear bomb
. Another example of the negative effects of
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 is pollution caused by the burning of fossil fuels. Some people argue that ozone layer depletion and global warming are caused by pollution. They forget that eco-friendly alternatives like wind energy and solar energy are
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 the result of innovations and can be used to operate machines. It is the responsibility of people to use cleaner sources of energy
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 of fossil fuels to protect
climate
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the climate
. A few people claim that computers and the internet are making the lifestyle of youth sedentary which is harmful in the long run. Today’s young people spend more time on social networking website than meeting friends and relatives in person.
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, it is about discipline and
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usage, which
 should be controlled by individuals. Inventions should not be held responsible for
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. Some people
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 argue that hacking, viruses, credit card scams etc., are
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 the result of modern innovations. In earlier days, these threats didn’t exist.
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, it should be remembered that these problems can be prevented to a certain extent using the same
technology
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. To sum up, modern inventions are beneficial and make our lives safer, easier and more comfortable. It is up to the individuals to decide how they should use
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. Overuse and lack of control mechanisms are the main drivers of mishaps.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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