Society is becoming obsessed with material goods like fast cars, designer clothes and flashy jewellery. We have stopped caring about the important tjibgs and that is why divorse rates are so high and family bonds are not strong anymore:our value system is disintegrating. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many people are interested towards vehicles which are attractive and
also
fashionable items like jewellery and trendy clothes. But, the caring towards the family or work related aspects are drastically coming down with which there is an increase in the divorce cases and worsening the bonds.
Firstly
, public view regarding the materialistic things and
also
the trendy items must be according to their needs but not to their greeds.
This
change can bring many changes in
one
's life.
For example
,
one
can spend more time spending with their family members, by focusing on their needs through eradicating their distraction on extra things which are not that important in life when compared to family and relationships.
Secondly
,
one
should keep in mind that, it is unnecessary to crave for things which are not permanent in their lives. These cravings don't only distract us from relationships, but
also
tempt us to spend more
money
, which will at
last
become useless if they are more than a need.
For example
, keeping an eye on extra things will obviously make us spend
money
more, through which there is a chance to
Suggestion
lose
loose
control on spending
money
. And
also
,
this
will make people more optimistic. Summarizing the above points, though the trendy items attract us to focus more than need, they will adversely affect
one
's common life by seperating them with their partners or family.
This
obsession will
also
lead us through spending more
money
than needed.I conclude that our ethics and values are becoming disintegrating, which is an adverse effect on society.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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