Nowadays, children have too much freedom. Some people think it may be dangerous in some aspects. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days there is not doubt that children do have more freedom than ever. The question is, Is

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much of freedom good or bad for them? In

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essay I am going to explain my vision in the matter. In terms if I agree or not, I do agree that young people now have too much space,

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, I agree that children have much more space than what it use to be in my age

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has too much space and freedom to look up anything that they wonder about and not having enough to fill answers for their ideas they can look it up online and have the answer for it. Even if

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appropriate for them or if it's not.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

123 words

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