Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

It is a controversial topic that gifted artists have to be given the opportunity to exhibit their opinion regardless of what their methods are. I personally believe that there should be a mechanism to control and assess the performance of artists, and
this
essay will discuss two main reasons why
art
makers should be under supervision.
First
of all, government and political staff always point out that movies,
art
, and music cause social unrest throughout the country. The concepts presented in these forms of
art
may generate conflict between governments and citizens that, in extreme cases, could break out civil war. In Syria,
for instance
, we can see that conflict between governments and
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citizen
citizens
ideology destroyed bonds between people, and it has torn the country apart and a large amount of people, especially children,
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is dying
are dying
.
However
, there is one exception that we might mention where the work of artists has contributed to positive changes in human history-one of the positive changes being democracy as we can see in many countries.
Secondly
, in case of children, controlling
art
works under the supervision of professional experts or agencies plays a vitally important role in children’s upbringing and education. Because
art
has been one of the main sources to educate children
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nowadays, so
nowadays so
that school curriculums encompass the all
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aspects
aspect
of
art
, which have significant impact on their lifestyle as well as their long-term goals.
Furthermore
, we need to hand traditional
art
down to future generations so that government has to give more attention to preserving it. In recent years, traditional
art
has been destroyed by new trends of
art
coming from overseas and artists
also
tend to accept these deliberately. To conclude, the products of
art
makers should be assessed by qualified experts, especially by pedagogical experts, so that we can prevent social instability and misunderstandings. It
also
might be mentioned that artists
also
need to have a desire to qualify their performance based on a universal approach and that their work need to promote the fabric of society.

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