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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
illustrats
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illustrates
howmany
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how many
 male and female students successfully finished
univercities
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universities
 in Canada between 1992 and 2007. Throughout
entire
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the entire
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 period of
time
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,time
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 female
graduates
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 significantly outnumbered male
graduates
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. The
number
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 of both male and female
studentsincreased
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students increased
students in creased
 drastically since 1992. In 1992, there were just over
secenty
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twenty
 thousand male
univercity
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university
graduates
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,
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whereas
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 in
by
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2007
this
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number
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 increased to just under 150,000.
Similarly
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, there were slightly below 100,000 and
this
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number
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inrease
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increased
 to almost 150,000 by 2007. Notably, the gap between males and females
graduated
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who graduated
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 from universities in Canada
also
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 increased.
In particular
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, in 1992 the
number
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 of Canadian women
obtained
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who obtained
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a univercity
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univercity
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university
degree
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degrees
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 was about 30,000 higher than the
number
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 of men,
while
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 in 2007,
this
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 gap increased to around
fifty five
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fifty-five
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thousands
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thousand
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. Between 1992 and 2006 there was
steady
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a steady
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 increase in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
canadias
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Canadians
Canadian
 student
graduates
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with out
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without
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 any significant periods of decline in those numbers.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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