Too much attention is paid to and too much money is spent on keeping pets, while people throughout the world are starving. - Discuss the arguments for and against keeping pets. - To what extent do you agree?
These days,
pets
seem to attract more and more attention and much money from people
. There is nothing to discuss if it does not have some debate about this
problem. Some say pets
is
taken care Change the verb form
are
too
much Change preposition
of too
at
both Change preposition
apply
physically
and Change the word
physical
mentally
aspects whilst starvation is happening all around the world. In Change the word
mental
this
essay, I will look at both sides of the argument and give my opinion. On the one hand, keeping pets
have benefit in many ways. Firstly
, to their owners, pets
bring a lot of fun and help people
reduce stress. Secondly
, to the community, create a new job market such
as selling pets’
accessories and food. Fix the agreement mistake
pet’
This
is a potential environment for everyone who want
to earn more money. Change the verb form
wants
Lastly
, to
the Change preposition
for
pets
themselves, food and others
like Correct quantifier usage
other
wash
, Wrong verb form
washing
toys
are always available for them. Correct word choice
and toys
On the other hand
, there are still many disadvantages. If the owners do not take care of their pets
carefully, they can go out and bite neighbours, this
is the most dangerous thing because some pets
can cause serious diseases. Another drawback is that pets
often lack of
freedom and survival skills. One more thing, in developed countries Remove the preposition
apply
as
Japan, Correct quantifier usage
such as
America
Correct word choice
and America
dosmetic
animals are given better food to eat than poor Correct your spelling
domestic
people
and that is
the reason why some against
keeping Add a missing verb
are against
pets
. In my opinion, keeping pets
bring
Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
people
such
many good things, it teachs
us responsibility, kindness and attentiveness. But Correct your spelling
teaches
people
should got
another Change the verb form
get
be got
think
coming before spending lots of money on a pet Correct your spelling
thing
while
people
over
the world are dying of hunger. In their hard time, we ought to open our Rephrase
all over
Fix the agreement mistake
hearts
heart
and give them the best things we Fix the agreement mistake
hearts
could
give.Wrong verb form
can
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion