IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

In some countries celebrities get higher salaries than senior politicians. What do you think reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

#countries #celebrities #salaries #politicians #reason #development
It is irrefutable that celebrities and politicians are the most renowned people around the globe. While, celebrities do earn more in some countries in comparison to the politicians. I believe it is a positive
development
 as it promotes professionalism. The entertainment industry, specifically movie culture is booming and mostly because of its global presence. Globalization has allowed the distributors to release movies around the world at the same time, generating worldwide revenues. To illustrate
this
, the Hollywood, generates two different revenue, one for the USA and another worldwide.
Also
, rights are sold to streaming partners
such
 as Netflix or Amazon, adding more to the profits. These business models have helped the entertainment industry to generate higher income's for celebrities and everyone else working in the industry.
This
development
 is positive as it makes people realise that being a politician is a noble cause. Many politicians attain the throne just to earn money and show power, as they are least bothered about the
development
 of the nation, something like
this
 would help getting real people into politics.
For example
, in India, politics is considered a full time job and a great source of income, while in Netherlands, it is considered a social service. It is because, politicians in Netherlands show zeal for the
development
 and not attaining self procurement. Politicians should adopt to work in limited salary as perks are great to go with it. In conclusion, celebrities earn a lot more than politicians because of the business and revenue models. While, politics is a cause not a profession and should not be weighed with salary.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: