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Libraries are obsolete these days. so universities should follow digital media. What is your opinion? Discuss advantages and disadvantages?

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Library
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A library
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is
the
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a
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 collection of numerous
books
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 of different categories. A teacher can't teach the entire subject in the
classrom
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classroom
, students need to refer
textbooks
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to textbooks
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 and many reference
books
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 to procure the knowledge. Nowadays, technology plays a significant role so
that
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the
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, majority of the masses prefer to read
in
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on
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 smart mobiles, laptops, computers, tablets and other smart gadgets.
According to
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 me, I opine
universites
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universities
, schools and colleges to utilise the internet and digital
media
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along with
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the
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apply
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libraries. The following subsequent paragraphs will give a better insight into
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of
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 topic.
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 of carrying plenty of physical copies of
books
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, it is
obsolutly
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absolutely
pramatic
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pragmatic
dramatic
to maintain a single weightless gadget which fits in our pocket. All those
books
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 which are available in
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library
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the library
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,
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apply
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can be accessed from any part of the world through our mobile
,
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apply
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 if there is an internet connection.
Moreover
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 ,
size
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the size
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 of
pdf
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PDF
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file
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files
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 and
word
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file
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files
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 is
less
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smaller
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 when compared to other audio and video files. Not only reading
books
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,
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apply
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 but
also
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audio
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audiobooks
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books
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 are booming in
this
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 decade.
Audio
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Audiobooks
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books
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, ease the task of a human being.
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 , one of my friends
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revised
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 the topics by
listening
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listening to
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 these audio
books
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 in
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the
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last
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 few hours prior to his examination.
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 , listening for
few
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a few
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 minutes has
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an enormous
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 impact rather
than
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to
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 reading for hours.
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In
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the
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contrast,
usage
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the usage
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 of digital
media
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also
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have
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has
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a negative phase.
Although
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 it is preferable to use social
media
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, it paves the way to
helath isuues
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health issues
if we over use. It results in affecting eye-sight and severe headache
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 if it is used for many hours. Digital
media
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 has many issues so that , people
also
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 read
books
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 in
Library
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 .
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 , my sister who
spend
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spends
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most of her time
infront
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in front
of
computer
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the computer
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 still
read
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reads
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books
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 when her eyes get stressed.
To conclude
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, both online and offline reading is to encouraged in universities so that, it is entirely
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the student
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student
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student's
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 choice to opine the mode of study.
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 ,
universties
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universities
should maintain and update the book resources and should provide access to students so that, they can
procoure
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procure
knowledge from
any where
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anywhere
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in the college.
Although
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the
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digital world is booming in
this
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 decade, certain individuals still visit the
library
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 to study in that atmosphere.

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