2.It seems that the air in some big cities is seriouly polluted. Give some causes of air pollution in Hanoi and suggest some solutions to this problem. You should write about 200 words.

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air

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contamination is becoming more and more deliberate in big cities especially in Hanoi. In

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essay, factors of the atmosphere corruption are given and

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some solutions are mentioned to tackle

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urgent societal problem. There are many reasons causing the infection of

air

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Hanoi but

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Hanoi, but

the presence of toxic substances from human activities are the major consideration. As you know, insecticide, pesticide,

weedicide

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and fertilizer are the four substances which have a huge consumption in agriculture activities.

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there are benefits to the

use

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of these

material

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materials

, there have

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been many environmental problems associated with the

use

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. When the farmer

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use

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uses

them, the harmful chemical will be emitted into the

air

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the sky and

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will cause

air

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pollution as well as water contamination. The

second

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explanation for atmosphere

coruption

lack of integrity or honesty (especially susceptibility to bribery); use of a position of trust for dishonest gain

corruption

hanoi

the capital city of Vietnam; located in North Vietnam

Hanoi

is that there is a great demand

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for

using personal vehicles.

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not only contribute to

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problems but

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problems, but

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lead to traffic jam

espacially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

in rush hour. These atmosphere issues will only be solved when there are suitable solutions to it. It is necessary and essential for each individual to raise environmental awareness and spread knowledge of

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problem.

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the government

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also need

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also needs

to pass and enforce

strict law

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strict laws

the strict law

to crack down on people who produce toxic chemical substances.

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, public transportation should be used as much as possible to both save our environment and lessen traffic congestion. At the same time

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all of us need to eliminate the

use

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of our own vehicles.

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Air pollution which

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Air pollution, which

is caused by many factors, aspects is the biggest problem in big cities, especially in Hanoi nowadays.

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, some proper solutions right

now is

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have now been

necessary.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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279 words

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2.It seems that the air in some big cities is seriouly polluted. Give some causes of air pollution in Hanoi and suggest some solutions to this problem. You should write about 200 words.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some animal species are now completely extinct. Many people believe that we should prevent this from happening in the future. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is sad that life is becoming increasingly stressful for most people. What is the reason of this phenomenon and how could this problem be solved?

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar ,which causes many health problems .Sugary products shoud be mad more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar . do you agree or disagree ?

Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in theirexams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.