2. It seems that the air in some big cities is seriouly polluted. Give some causes of air pollution in Hanoi and suggest some solutions to this problem. You should write about 200 words.

Today,
air
contamination is becoming more and more deliberate in big cities especially in Hanoi. In
this
essay, factors of the atmosphere corruption are given and
also
some solutions are mentioned to tackle
this
urgent societal problem. There are many reasons causing the infection of
air
in
Hanoi but
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Hanoi, but
the presence of toxic substances from human activities are the major consideration. As you know, insecticide, pesticide,
weedicide
and fertilizer are the four substances which have a huge consumption in agriculture activities.
Although
there are benefits to the
use
of these
material
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materials
, there have
also
been many environmental problems associated with the
use
. When the farmer
use
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uses
them, the harmful chemical will be emitted into the
air
,
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,
the sky and
this
will cause
air
pollution as well as water contamination. The
second
explanation for atmosphere
coruption
lack of integrity or honesty (especially susceptibility to bribery); use of a position of trust for dishonest gain
corruption
in
hanoi
the capital city of Vietnam; located in North Vietnam
Hanoi
is that there is a great demand
on
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for
using personal vehicles.
This
not only contribute to
air
problems but
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problems, but
also
lead to traffic jam
espacially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
in rush hour. These atmosphere issues will only be solved when there are suitable solutions to it. It is necessary and essential for each individual to raise environmental awareness and spread knowledge of
this
problem.
In addition
,
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,
the government
also need
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also needs
to pass and enforce
strict law
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strict laws
the strict law
to crack down on people who produce toxic chemical substances.
Moreover
, public transportation should be used as much as possible to both save our environment and lessen traffic congestion. At the same time
,
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,
all of us need to eliminate the
use
of our own vehicles.
Air pollution which
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Air pollution, which
is caused by many factors, aspects is the biggest problem in big cities, especially in Hanoi nowadays.
Therefore
, some proper solutions right
now is
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have now been
necessary.
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