More and more people are allowing their children to play on computer and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
fast changing
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
Modern
mordern
era, technology upgrade day by day and people of each age-group are using many devices. The numerous parents
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are encouraged
encourage
are encouraging
are encourage
their kinds to play computer games because they believe with the help of
this
, they can develop technology skills. I would like to put shine on
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the merits
merits
and demerits of playing on computer in
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subsequent
subsequently
subsquently
paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are several reasons which benefit the children in developing their skills while using
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
eletronic
devices.
Firstly
, playing on gadgets help kinds in
increasing in quantity or value
raising
rising
the level of their digital understanding which is useful in their life.
Furthermore
, in today's world most of the school project
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will work
work
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required, such
required such
require
such
appliances like laptop and tablet etc..
For instance
, latest studies prove that few assignments are done by using
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a computer
computer
which need technology intelligence of
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children
the child
a child
child
.
Lastly
, games which the youngster play on
displaying numbers rather than scale positions
digital
digitial
gadgets developed their graphical knowledge as well as increasing their creativity. On the
very opposed in nature or character or purpose
contrary
contract
contracy
, excess usage of these games
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also has
also have
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a negative effect
negative effects
the negative effect
negative effect
.
First
and foremost, it
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adversely harms
adversely harm
our health.
For example
, recent
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
reaserach
study that most of the teenagers
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now days
nowdays
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are using
uses
mobile phone
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a lot
alot
which result in reducing their eye sight.
In addition
, child's concentration power decline and because of
this
, they are not able to focus on study and their
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
carer
carers
carrer
.
Last
but not least, it
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decreases
decrease
their
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
communicational
power to
act together or towards others or with others
interact
intreact
with
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people, which
people which
sometimes affect their behaviour
also
. To encapsulate the whole notion, I gather that everything
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has
have
two sides
that is
advantages and disadvantages.
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Digital
Digitial
games benefiting the kids.
However
, if they
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use
uses
over the
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limit, then
limit
then
it
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has
have
awful
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resulted
result
as well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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