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In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

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In todays' world
crime
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rate
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 is escalating in numerous nations. Not only the transgressions
rate
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, but
also
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 the way of
crime
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 is getting worse. Criminals who supposed to be behind the bars are escaping and leading a mundane
life
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 in the public. According to me,
government
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the government
 should give prominence to control
this
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 breach
rate
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. The following paragraphs
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 give a better insight into
this
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 topic. Criminals are people like us, who lead the prosaic
life
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 along with the society.
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, most of the
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prisioners
a person who is confined; especially a prisoner of war
prisoners
 are uneducated. Criminals feel it as an appropriate to do crimes for money. To lead a happy
life
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, money is the significant
entailmemt
something that is inferred (deduced or entailed or implied)
entailment
. Money and
eduaction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 are some of the main reasons why transgressions are escalating so that, government should emphasis on education and employment.
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, if all the people are educated in the nation,
undoubtedly criminal
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the undoubtedly criminal rate
undoubtedly criminal rates
rate
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 can be controlled. On the contrast, revenge might be one of the reasons to attempt a
crime
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. Whereas
this
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 is an exceptional case because no one can make a guess of emotions of others. They can be controlled by bringing some awareness in human
life
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 importance.
Moreover
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,
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prisioners
a person who is confined; especially a prisoner of war
prisoners
parishioners
 who are behind the bars are to be examined properly before leaving them
into
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in
 public after their imprisonment. Government should track the existing criminals, so that
majority
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the majority
 of the
trangressions
the act of transgressing; the violation of a law or a duty or moral principle
transgressions
transgression
 will reduce. To conclude, education encounters in reduction of
breach
Suggestion
the breach rate
rate
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 in any of the nations.
However
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eduacted
possessing an education (especially having more than average knowledge)
educated
 person can make money on his own by doing some kind of job. In parallel,
government
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the government
governments
 should bring
change
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a change
 in existing criminals and
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prisioners
a person who is confined; especially a prisoner of war
prisoners
parishioners
 by providing some
employemet
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
 to them.
In addition
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 to
this
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, tracking these existing
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prisioners
a person who is confined; especially a prisoner of war
prisoners
parishioners
 can help in mitigating the
crime
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rate
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 to a particular extent.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • violent crimes
  • socioeconomic factors
  • law enforcement
  • technology
  • education
  • employment
  • drug abuse
  • alcohol abuse
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • effectiveness
  • investing
  • job creation
  • social support
  • community engagement
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