Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people.

In recent t
ime,
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times
it is unquestionable that money is a vital part of people’s existence. Some claim that affluent people have more opportunity to offer help to those in need. I
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On
the contrary, I believe that e
very one
all people
everyone
has c
apability
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the capability
to give monetary help to u
npriviledge
people. Not only supporting the needy people emotionally, but
also
encouraging them to improve their life are other ways to help them. Emotional support is crucial in people’s life as it enables them to realize that they still have someone to be with during the hardships. Even though, they find it difficult to face a brand new day, they would still see t
he brighter
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the bright
side of the story because there are a lot of positive people surrounding them.
For instance
, my friend Sarah has been diagnosed with L
eukemia
malignant neoplasm of blood-forming tissues; characterized by abnormal proliferation of leukocytes; one of the four major types of cancer
leukaemia
few months ago. Her family could not afford to fund her medical e
xpenses but
Accept comma addition
expenses, but
made sure that Sarah is emotionally supported. I
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At
this
event, her family and friends are always present in her therapy which makes her stronger.
This
is one of the two ways for people t
o offer
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offer
help.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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