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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programs (for example working on charity, teaching sport to younger people) To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, preparing children for their social responsibility is a crucial part of both
school
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 and parents. For achieving
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 goal, we should try to encourage high
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 students to take part in voluntary jobs in different aspects.
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 my point of view, I am in
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promote over another
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 to make these jobs obligatory for them. To start with, I think these kinds of mini-jobs can be a useful experiment for students and it can improve their career potential.
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 that, they can learn new skills and enhance their workmanship, to be more productive in their society.
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, in the UK, primary
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 students have to do a little job in the summer that they are more obsessed with and at the end of each month, they should write a report for their
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 consultant. To sum up, it will give them a great perspective in which field they want to work. Another reason that we may have
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being one more than one
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 obligatory these kinds of programs is that
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 it can give
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infers
 a sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 and confidence to use their potential in a better way.
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, they would learn to help other mankind is
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 a respectful action and they will learn that we have a duty to our other fellows.
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, it can be a turning point for some students to take their lessons more seriously and try to be more helpful for their community. In conclusion, I totally agree to make these free community
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services, obligatory
 for students, because it has so many beneficial results for them
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, it can be a game-changer for some students to understand the life meaning.

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