More and more people are allowing their children to play on computer and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

The many parents are allowing their kid to play on
computer
and tablets as they think that teenager should learn technology skills.
This
essay will discuss
merits
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the merits
and demerits of playing on
computer
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subsequent paragraphs
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To begin
with, there are many things which
benefirs
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benefit
benefits
the youngster in developing their skills. While using
electronical
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
electrical
devices.
Firstly
, it
help
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helps
to increase the
computer
understanding and develop their technological skills.
Furthermore
, the children can complete their project easily and
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
with the use of
computer
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computers
a computer
the computer
.
Lastly
, when the children can play the games on
computer
or
tablets
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tablets, then
then
teenagers graphical knowledge can be
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increased
.
In contrast
, these games
also
have some negative effect. When the child
use
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uses
computer
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the computer
and playing the games in excess.
Then
the kids eye sight weak and some health
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issues
.
In addition
, the
consentration
the strength of a solution; number of molecules of a substance in a given volume
concentration
power of a child
is decreases
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decreases
. And they
are lost
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lose
their stability of brain
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the stability of their brain
their stability of the brain
. Some pupils playing
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on mobile phones 4 to 5 hours and
then
their behaviour
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are
very rude. To encapsulate the whole motion, I gather that
everyting
all things
everything
have
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has
two different sides
that is
advantages and disadvantages. Digital games can
benefiting
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benefit
pupils.
However
, if they use over the
limit
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limit, then
then
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has
bad effect
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a bad effect
bad effects
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