Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do up and community work to what extent do you agree ? instead of being put behind bars.

Nowadays, There are many prisoners locked down behind the bars and left idle while taking their punishment period.
However
, many of them could spend their free time on the social
service
to atone their sin while waiting for their freedom. From my point of view, These prisoners with a light crime or a few years of jailing should be
allow
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allowed
to
service
the community. Exploring the benefits and losses of applying the
service
task for these captives will prove
this
.
First
of all, These people could relieve their
bordom
the feeling of being bored by something tedious
boredom
bottom
with these
activitys
any specific behavior
activities
activity
activists
while taking the punishment.
Likewise
, many nations had been applied a lot of
task
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tasks
,
such
as, the sewer cleaning, the pedestrian path paving, or some farming job that could be a
service
to public and can
provided
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provide
a cheap
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
to help
in
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with
many troublesome tasks. Even so, they need to be monitored to avoid the risk of escaping or the risk to cause any damage to
surrounding
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the surrounding
.
In other words
, these
presioners
a person who is confined; especially a prisoner of war
prisoners
of a light crime or a few years of penalty left should be the ideal target so as to have less reason to escape. On the one hand, their
service
might
provided
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provide
a better image for many post-prisoners. As many of them were going to
encountering
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be encountering
encounter
many hardships or struggling to get a job for living in the future. In order to solve these problems, some countries
alloweded
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allowed
them to atone their sin with many
type
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types
of community works while they are taking their punishment.
Nontheless
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Nonetheless
,
this
method was working for many
celebrities but
Accept comma addition
celebrities, but
less effective on the other common captives. By
this
I mean, they have the right to have a chance to redeem for their crime and
also
have the right to improve their image for their future being. In conclusion, these
guity
responsible for or chargeable with a reprehensible act
guilty
men could be more useful with their duties
instate
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in state
of remaining idle behind those bars. It
can be accept
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can accept
can be accepted
that they should spend their jail period on many social services with a condition of low escaping risk. As for the
society
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societal
benefits,
this
approach could be better in
longterm
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the long term
long term
as they could have a chance to turn over a new leaf with a better life.
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