Some people believe that the range of technology available to individual today is increasing the gap between poor and rich people others think it is an having opposite effect Discuss both view and give your opinon

In
this
concurrent world the development of
technology
is increasing as day by day.
Thus some
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Thus, some
folks think that the growth of automation is providing equal social status while others refuse that. In my
perspective it
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perspective, it
has more merits than demerits. Both views will be discussed and I will give my opinion in
further
essay
To begin
with rich people can buy many gadgets with the power of
money
.
Furthermore they
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Furthermore, they
often show up in
community
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the community
. Follow that it hurts people who are not able to allocate their
money
behind of buying advance
appratus
direct or control; projects, businesses, etc.
operates
apparatus
.
For example
,
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,
my uncle who is living in Canada often buys electronic tools and he often shows up whenever he comes in India which sometimes hurt some folks in their peer group.
In
contrast some
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contrast, some
persons believe that nowadays
technology
is
boon
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a boon
for poor people. Follow that they can show their talent through
technology
. So they can make better career which
help
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helps
them to earn
higher amount
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a higher amount
higher amounts
of
money
.
For example
,
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,
Ranu Mandal was street singer and she was famous in one night by showing her talent through
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not thin; of a specific thickness or of relatively great extent from one surface to the opposite usually in the smallest of the three solid dimensions
thick
tick
-
tok
in the direction of
to
torque
task
application. Now she
charges
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is charging
higher amount fees for singing a song in movies In my perspective,
technology
is most useful for decreasing
gap
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the gap
between poor and rich people because
technology
helps children to get
best
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the best
better
education from any world class University at any part of
world
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the world
.
Hence they
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Hence, they
can learn more effectively in any particular subject. Follow that, they can get lucrative job which helps them to come out
form
a giver or sender
from
their poor
econimical
using the minimum of time or resources necessary for effectiveness
economical
stautus
the relative position or standing of things or especially persons in a society
status
states
.
Therefore
technology
plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
for deceasing
money
equality between people. To recapitulate, any person can earn more than any past decades due to
development
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the development
of
technology
which helps them to improve their social and economical status.

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