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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared
#show #results #survey #adult #education #first #adults #study #people #costs
The diagram shows the procedure of collects
up
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weather information
of
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the Astrallian
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Astrallian
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Australian
 Bureau of
Meterology
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Meteorology
Metrology
. In general,
this
 diagram
describe
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describes
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 how the
wether
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weather
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data
 is collected,
analysis
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 and broadcast to people. There are main three sources for
collect
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data
.
Insted
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Instead
 for satellite, radar and drilling buoy.
This
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 sources continuously collect
data
 and send it to
main
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 computer. satellite take satellite photos,
buoy
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 produce synoptic charts and
finally
redar
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radar
 help to monitor climate changes. After that
data
 is analysed by
main
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 computer system
then
reavels
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travels
reveals
revels
 final report about
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particuler
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particular
 situation.
According to
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the circumstance
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circumstance
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circumstances
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 of
analysis
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the analysis
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 process, they issue
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an announcement
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announcement
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announcements
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 to
public
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the public
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 through
televition
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television
 and radio. Telephone
announcement
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also
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are also
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 used to
spred
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spread
speed
 new updates.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words data with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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