More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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Wild animals are disappearing from our planet at a staggering rate. Two main reasons for
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worrisome development are deforestation and poaching, but there are measures we can take to control these threats and make sure we maintain healthy
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populations. As the demands for resources increase, our forests and the animals that live in them are suffering. With every acre of land lost to industrial timber harvests,
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habitats are shrinking and the species that relied on them are dying out.
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is true in the United States where forests owned by lumber companies, which make up 60% of all forests in the country, are losing the natural richness that keeps thousands of plants and animals alive.
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, today some governments are working to help forestry
businesses harvest
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businesses, harvest
in a responsible way while protecting and restoring the land for
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. These governments are providing financial support to ensure that habitats are restored and safeguarded.
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is evident in the United States where large sections of privately-owned forests are being cultivated and preserved forever with the help of government grants. After habitat destruction, poaching, which involves the illegal killing, hunting and capturing of wild animals for sale, is the biggest threat to
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. Consumer demand for animal body parts for medicines or trophies is increasing and millions of animals, birds, plants and marine life are killed every year. More specifically, a recent report stated that
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trade accounts for the killing or capture of 100 million tons of fish and 1.5 million living birds annually.
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illegal
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trade is a huge challenge to overcome, some countries are stepping up their efforts to protect animals and it’s working. These governments are taking the problem very seriously by creating strict laws and providing the funding to create
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militaristic, anti
-poaching enforcement units to catch and punish trappers and hunters.
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is the case in
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Mali, where
highly skilled teams of soldiers have been able to successfully protect the elephants in a reserve since 2017 without the loss of one animal. Our world is in danger of losing more and more animal species every day. If governments take the issue seriously and work to replenish habitats and stop poachers, future generations will
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be able to enjoy the benefits of sharing the earth with these magnificent beasts.

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