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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

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It is argued by some that multimedia advertising is responsible of what products people choose when they are buying. In my opinion, I believe that modern society is suffering a huge marketing influence and it produce that consumers buy things that they do not really need.
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, it does not work in all cases.
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 of all, using of social media is increasing more and more during the years.
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 and apps are a strategic place to post an advertising an expect impact and successful results. That means a boost on the
product
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 advertised sells. Social media users would start to believe that they really need that
product
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, and
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, most of them, will make the purchase without thinking too much about it.
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, each consumer is different, for that reason, not everybody falls in the advertising webs. There exist people vulnerable who believe that buying something, their life would change, being better and happier.
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, the key is the mood that the person has at that specific moment.
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, if somebody feels depressive or did not have a nice day, a way to calming
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 feeling could be buying some
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 which is seen on a website,
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 as Facebook. It is an usual method to scape of the reality. In conclusion, marketing in social media works in most cases. People spend a long time using the internet and popular apps, for that reason, they are exposed to these kind of advertising every day. It could make them believe that
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product
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 is amazing and totally necessary for their lives.
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