Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is it a negative or positive development? Give your explanation using some relevant examples from your experience.

Children are the future of any Country and their proper
development both
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development, both
physical and emotional is very crucial.
This
development can happen only if the proper
education
is given to them. With changing
times more
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times, more
and more parents are educated and are aware regarding the importance of their
children
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children's
child's
education
.
This
awareness has turned into higher expectations of parents where they feel that their children should perform better than their counterparts.
Therefore
, they put more and more pressure on their children
.
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.
They make them study 24*7, arrange tuitions for them. They seem to forget the capability of their
child
. If the
child
is doing well in other activities
such
as sports or music, dance etc.
they
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They
don’t encourage them. The main focal point is studies. It may so happen that a
child
may be good in one subject and not as good in others. But there are many parents who fail to praise their children on getting distinction in one subject rather they will scold them on not getting appropriate marks in the other subject. With
education
taking the prime seat in the nation’s development, the
Education
Institutions
has increased
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have increased
their criteria of selection. There was a time when the whole world was happy with a
child
scoring 60 percentage, but in the present scenario, the
child
scoring 60% is not able to get admission in the recognized colleges all over the world. A student scoring 90%
also
has to wait for his selection. As the priority is given to those scoring 100 percentage of marks
.
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.
The blame can be given to the
education
system
also
as scoring 100% is not a difficult task
any more
at the present or from now on; usually used with a negative
anymore
. In
this
situation, parents have no other choice but to build pressure on their children. But ultimately the
child
suffers as he feels
burdened and
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burdened, and
is unable to perform. He is always scared of his parents and not able to fully concentrate on his studies as well, due to which more and more children are becoming the victim of depression and the suicide cases are
also
at their
high
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highest
.
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.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
is a misconception that if the pressure is built up they may perform
best
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better
, but
this
is just a myth, as parents need to help their children in their studies and encourage them to become a responsible citizen of the country.

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