It is observed that most governments pay a lot of money for the art projects. For instance, there are more and more paintings and sculpture tures seen in public places. Some people say that it is wrong and govern ments should spend more money on other important things of public in pinterest. Do you agree or disagree?

There had been researched that numbers of
government
allocated many amount of money to fund the art activities.
As a result
, many public places now filled with installations and pictures. A few people disagree with the
government
choice and suggested that the money should spend on other pivotal things of the civil interest.
This
essay takes side to agree with the suggestion and would elaborate some of the explanations below. Artistic sectors are very important to develop people's creativity, to nurture their hobby as nowadays the workforce tends to give so much pressure on one's shoulders. For some reasons, arts could be a medium to release stress, to enjoy the live and
moreover
to add colours in
this
live. Many different peoples from different background could be united as one as they can dance together on the same rhythm of music.
Nevertheless
,
this
activity should not not be the
government
's focal point, because
this
was categorized as a tertiary needs, after other more important things
such
as health and educations. Numbers of people nowadays still live in poverty, many children are born with stunting problem because their parents could not afford sufficient food to give the right amount of nutritions for their babies. Others are
also
still jobless, they could not finish their education because some schools today set excessive tuition fee. For these cases, the society really in need of the
government
's hand, to help them raise and to give them supports, especially in terms of money. It is suggested that the
government
might have to put an extra attention on these fields
first
, after
this
one could have been fulfilled, the art industry might be followed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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