One good way to promote world peace is through international sporting events. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some today
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feels
feel
that international sporting events are an opportunity to encourage world peace between traditionally opposed nations. In my opinion, the shared
the quality of affording easy familiarity and sociability
camaraderie
comradery
is marginal enough as to be largely meaningless. Proponents would argue that these events strengthen national bonds, particularly for the host country. Take the recent Olympics in Brasil as an example.
of or relating to or characteristic of Brazil or the people of Brazil
Brazilian
Brasilian
citizens and the government may have harboured animosity and prejudices towards various other countries where they have political, geographic, or economic ties. These predispositions might soften in citizens as they replace their generalised impressions with the real people now staying in their hotels, eating in their restaurants and passing them on the street. Governments will
also
have the opportunity to meet with foreign leaders in a spirit of friendly competition and without the tension of trade or military talks.
Nonetheless
, only a very small percentage of people will be influenced in
this
way relative to the global interactions that actually impact world peace. A good example of
this
would be the complex civil war taking place in Syria. Very few citizens in a war-torn nation care about
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sports
sporting
events, if they have any
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representation
representatives
, and the leaders may not even make the trip. They will be more concerned about which sides Russia and the United States are supporting and the outstanding problems that led to conflict in the
first
place. World peace is
further
imperiled by other Middle Eastern countries with a religious affiliation who are unlikely to be pacified through a football match. Competitions like the Olympics and World Cup cannot in any way alter these underlying sources of conflict. In conclusion, sports tournaments have very little role to play in a more peaceful world. Countries should take part in them to stir up national pride and achieve glory, not as a means to an unachievable political end.

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