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some people think that scientist experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human life. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Scientific experimenting with animal
gradually become
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gradually becomes
 a popular
way
 among scientists for coping with some disease. Some people think it is harmful and the others disagree with that. I believe we have to do
such
 experiments to prevent
sarious
concerned with work or important matters rather than play or trivialities
serious
spurious
 dangers
for
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to
 human
life but
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life, but
this
way
 should be used only for essential matter. On the one hand, If
scientist
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a scientist
scientists
 had not tested
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 vaccines on animals the human generation might have
extincted
no longer in existence; lost or especially having died out leaving no living representatives
extinct
 so far. In some
cases humans
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cases, humans
life
 may be at risk and
scientist
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the scientist
 must choose human health rather than animal health.
Moreover
, some experiments are not harmful for animals
such
 as FMRI or any experiments which used for testing medical instruments. Even if we want to test every experimental
way
, It is better to do
on
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with
 those animals whose are going to die.
On the other hand
 all
creator
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creators
 have the right to
life
 and no one can not hurt them for experimental reasons.
Although
, Experiment on animals is the easiest
way
, It is not the only
way
.
Nowaday
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Nowadays
, simulating the human's
body
 enable scientists to predict Whether
this
 medical
way
 are effective or not. According to a
statistics
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statistic
to
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of
 80% medical experiments are predictable to what extent
are
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is
 harmful thanks to simulating
humans
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human
human's
body
. Beside
this
, Experimenting on animals in some cases may does not have acceptable results because, the
body
 of that animal may have not the same mechanism
to
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for
 responding the treat with human's
body
 and it may be clear in the future. To sum up,
However any
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However, any
 creature
have
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has
 the right to
life
 and no kind-hearted person will not
accepted
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accept
 doing
such
experiments but,
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experiments, but
 it is necessary for
human's
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the human's life
life
 to
such
 experiments will be done in future.

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