Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teachign sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some schools of thoughts
asserts
Suggestion
assert
that working for a society without any sake of personal benefits should be added into the high school curriculum. I completely agree with the statement, because those sort of
activties
any specific behavior
activities
makes
Suggestion
make
a child healthy
,
Accept space
,
rational thinker, and well
awares
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
about a community.
To begin
with, the volunteer activities at
school level enhance
Suggestion
the school level to enhance
the school level enhance
one's ability to work effectively in a group.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, it makes
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
more confident in front of the world and mould them to become a good leader. The non-paid service for humans increase empathy in students, which plays an indispensable role in their career, they think positively about for their neighbours and even for any person of the world.
For instance
, if a person collects an amount just for the sake to help mankind, it will provide him a better satisfaction. According to the Harvard research department, spending so one's time for good purposes, feeling them a healthy experience and increase their life span.
Moreover
, to teach sports to the younger children
provide
Suggestion
provides
you to learn about the diversity of behaviours and explore your
cabability
the quality of being capable -- physically or intellectually or legally
capability
capabilities
to overcome on a difficult situation. For
exmple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
, a child is playing a game and that moment someone realize that it plays exceptionally,
then
this
perdiction
the act of predicting (as by reasoning about the future)
prediction
might be transformed him to become an eminent athlete
.
Accept space
.
In conclusion,
introduction
Suggestion
the introduction
of non-paid work as a syllabus of children have a multitude of benefits on a nation. In
this
epoch, it is mandatory for a student to do volunteer activity in order to obtain a professional profile.

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