Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

There are two types of museums in terms of payment. One of them is that visitors must pay some amount of
money which
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money, which
is determined by
museum
’s officials and another option is free entrance. I will intend to dwell on
pros
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the pros
and cons about paying
money
while visiting the
museum
in the following paragraphs.
First
of all, charging people for admission to museums
provide
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provides
some benefits to both visitors and owners of the
museum
. One of the advantages is that being
crowded
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a crowded museum
museum
might be prevented by paying
money
for visiting the
museum
.
For example
, if people have to spend
money
for entering the
museum
, most of the people may do not prefer to visit it because of the saving
money
. By
this
result, museums are not very crowded
thus
people charging
money
, can enjoy freely visiting.
Last
but not least, only curious people visit the
museum
hence
museums achieve their purpose.
On the other hand
, some people, especially
students can
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students, can
not visit these museums due to the payment. Because most of the students
do not working
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are not working
aren't working
don't work
do not work
so they do not have any income. As a
consequent
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consequence
of
this
, some of them may not want to spend their
money
for museums.
However
, if museums were free, pupils would have visited them and would learn a lot of things from them.
Also
, they can improve their knowledge by visiting them. To sum up, there are some advantages of charging people for admission to museums in terms of reducing
crowd
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crowding
and serving only concerned people. In my opinion, advantages of paying
money
to enter museums outweigh the disadvantages. I think,
this
payment should be too expensive. It should be
affordable particularly
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affordable, particularly
unemployed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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