Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter, suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not be available Write at least 150 words.

Dear Mrs Barrett, My name is Susan Swift and I am writing to express my interest in

beinga

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being a

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house helper for a couple of hours daily in the coming summer. I am capable of doing some gardening

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as grass trimming and irrigation of the plants.

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, I am good at computer knowledge,

therefore

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, I can fix the computer and internet issues that annoyed you since a few months ago. I found the advertisement that you

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posted on the notice board of the ABC community centre

last

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week. Your house is near my current accom. There

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no plans for me in the coming summer vacation yet and I might be the only one who

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speak English fluently and communicate well with you. I will be available

everyday

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every day

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in July and August except the 21st of July because I will have a tennis competition on that day. Please feel free to contact me if you need

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help. Yours sincerely, Susan Swift

andy1031227

Jul 6, 2024

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task achievement

Consider revising your opening sentence for clarity. Instead of 'interest in beinga house helper,' you might want to write 'interest in becoming a house helper.'

suitable writing tone

Try to maintain a more formal tone throughout. For instance, you could use 'accommodation' instead of 'accom.'

complete response

The letter effectively addresses all the points required by the task, such as suggesting how you can help, expressing why you would like to do the work, and specifying your availability.

logical structure

The letter has a clear and logical structure, with a proper greeting and closing.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

165 words

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Domestic chores
Culinary skills
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Work ethic
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Prior commitments
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