some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural backgrounds living together in the same country makes the country develop faster. do you agree or disagree?

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am totally agreed
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totally agree
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statement
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the statement
a statement
,
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,
Mashup of cultures
creats
make or cause to be or to become
creates
a better work place as ideas are gathered there all over the globe. People with divergent speculation helps a lot to reach the most suitable solution
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the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
of competition
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rises, so
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make
making
the most of their abilities
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make a logical or causal connection
relating
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benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
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organisation
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the organisation
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as well

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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