We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

It is true that computers are becoming more and more widely employed in different aspects of
human world
Suggestion
the human world
. As
this
trend carries on, there will certainly be more things they can do for us. In my opinion,
this
is generally beneficial for us, despite some related issues we need to be wary of. Out of many possible use cases, computer
us
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
use
in Education and E-commerce is quite promising and is considered as game
changer
Suggestion
changing
. Computers and specific software can be used to improve class management for teachers by automating some
arduious
characterized by effort to the point of exhaustion; especially physical effort
arduous
data
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
tasks, which can free them to bring more creative activities. In E-commerce industry, smarter supply chain and delivery system empowered by computers can really boost sales and improve customer satisfaction. I must confess there are serious issues,
such
as cyber crimes, system robustness problems and increasing power
comsumption
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
. But generally speaking, we gain much more than the loss. Our whole society has become much more productive compared to pre-computer ear. Computers do a lot of boring and dull work for human beings, who can
then
spend time on more vital tasks. As for our collective knowledges, software makes it easier to store, archive, search and share them. The result? Better human civilization
transcedent
Suggestion
transcends
transcend
the imagination of our ancestors. In conclusion, as no single person can stop the wider and wider use of computers, I believe we need to accelerate
this
process while be vigilant to possible issues brought by it. So that we can advance our cultural and economic achievements to a higher level.

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