The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since it construction in 1950.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since it construction in 1950.
The maps illustrate how West Park Secondary
School
has gone through some major changes
in
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over
three
various time periods (1950, 1980 and 2010).
Overall
,
it is clear that
the main road remained in place over
the
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time.
Besides
, over a fifty-year period from 1950 to 2010,
school
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is extended
while
the house area is demolished in the
school
's layout
diagram
. In 1950, There were
three
houses
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rows nearby
school
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;
however
, it is replaced by other buildings
is
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that
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Science block and
Car
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park in 1980.
In addition
, farmland is
also
replaced
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field
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in 1980.
Furthermore
, these buildings are constructed with the purpose of accommodating the increase in student enrolments. From 1980 to 2020, the
school
's layout
diagram
change
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in
size
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of
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some areas. There was a dramatic increase in the
size
of the car park, compared to
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in 1980. When deciding to extend
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car
par
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area, certainly
school
facilities had to
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sacrificed
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. Obviously, in the
school
's layout
diagram
,
ports
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field has lost
three
quarters its
size
, and the playground
also
is downsized by
one
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three
its
size
, compared
the
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school
diagram
in 1980.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, three, diagram, size with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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