The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since it construction in 1950.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since it construction in 1950.
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The provided
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shows the
changes
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West Park Secondary
School
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has undergone since it was first established in 1950. As is presented, the
school
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has gone through some major
changes
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and has
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remained the same since 1950. When looking at the diagrams, you can see that the main
school
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building has not changed at all. There was an additional building added
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in 1980 called the Science block which was added to accommodate the
increase
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in student enrolments, which
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was not
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anticipating
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. The only other major
changes
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have been to its surroundings.
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the
school
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’s layout
diagram
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of the year 2010, there has been an
increase
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in the size of the car park compared to the
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school
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layout
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. When deciding to
increase
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the
school
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car park area, certain
school
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facilities had to be sacrificed,
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, the sports field is a
third
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of its size compared to the 1980’s
school
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layout
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. The playground was
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downsized by a quarter of its original size in 1950 and 1980. My conclusion is that these
changes
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had to be done in order to accommodate a major
increase
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in enrolments of students since its establishment in 1950 and maybe
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due to
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the growth in population and developments in their area.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words diagram, changes, school, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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