The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since it construction in 1950.
The provided
diagram
shows the changes
West Park Secondary School
has undergone since it was first established in 1950.
As is presented, the school
has gone through some major changes
and has also
remained the same since 1950. When looking at the diagrams, you can see that the main school
building has not changed at all. There was an additional building added on
in 1980 called the Science block which was added to accommodate the Change preposition
apply
increase
in student enrolments, which it
was not Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
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apply
anticipating
. The only other major Replace the word
anticipated
changes
have been to its surroundings. According to
the school
’s layout diagram
of the year 2010, there has been an increase
in the size of the car park compared to the 1980’s
Change noun form
1980s
school
layout diagram
. When deciding to increase
the school
car park area, certain school
facilities had to be sacrificed, for instance
, the sports field is a third
of its size compared to the 1980’s school
layout diagram
. The playground was also
downsized by a quarter of its original size in 1950 and 1980.
My conclusion is that these changes
had to be done in order to accommodate a major increase
in enrolments of students since its establishment in 1950 and maybe also
due to
the growth in population and developments in their area.Submitted by nguyennhancrazy on
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