Some people think that teenagers who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adult criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Adolescent crimes have been more and more concerned
by
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with
the public in recent several years. It is argued that some individuals believe that teenagers who break the law should be treated as adults.
This
essay
disagree
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disagrees
with that view because
firstly
, these teenagers
do not reach
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does not reach
to the age to
response
their behaviour and
secondly
, giving an opportunity to correct self is
also
a good way of
education
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educating
. Teenagers' age is not reaching to the level that they could
response
some bad behaviours. From the perspective of laws in many countries, people should
response
their work after 18 years old. In the period of adolescence, these young people are not independent. Looking after them and educate them are the responsibility and obligation of their parents. In
this
case, an adolescent commit a crime whose parents should
also
be punished or share the
panalty
the act of punishing
penalty
planet
with their son or daughter.
For example
, in ancient China, the society very focussed on
education
and heritage between generations. If a child or teenager who acquire some bad behaviours, whose parents and even teacher would be punished, which is an important element that
low
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lower
crime rates in Chinese history.
In addition
, treating teenagers should be different with adult criminals which is
also
a reasonable way to give them a chance to renew themselves. From the view of
education
and psychology,
although
adolescents are close to adults physically, their knowledge, social experiences and mind are quiet immature.
This
means that their world views have not been fixed, and it is possible to change them if the society could give him or her a range of feasible educations.
For instance
, Li Hua, a famous scientist from Asia, he was a very
noughty
suggestive of sexual impropriety
naughty
boy when he was young. The
commitee
a special group delegated to consider some matter
committee
of local community had considered sending him to some special area to accept manage, but
last
For fear that, in order to prevent
lest
they give him an opportunity and
then
he met a nice teacher in the high school.
This
changed his life and he started to fall in love with biology.
In other words
,
such
decision
also change
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also changes
has also changed
is also changing
the world. To conclude, I disagree with treating teenager crimes as the same way for adults', because it is unreasonable to let adolescents
response
everything and it is more important for treating them in proper
education
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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