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In the future it seems to be more difficult to live on earth. More money should be spent on researching other plants to live. Agree/Disagree?

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There is a concern that
earth
 will not be a convenient place to live in the future. It is believed that more
money
 should be invested in exploring other planets as a habitat. I disagree with
this
 statement and will provide reasons for opposing it. The statement that it is getting more challenging to live on
earth
 is true
as a result
 of various causes
such
 as the outbreak of unknown viruses, global warming, wars, and etc.
However
, I believe that investing
money
 in finding solutions to mitigate the consequences of these disasters is worth more than exploring the possibility of the existence of life on other planets. Since we, as human beings, have developed decent knowledge on issues related to living conditions on
earth
, and we only need to add to those.
For example
, developing knowledge on the design of resistance buildings to severe earthquakes would cost less
money
 and time in comparison to building new cities on Mars! The other reason is human beings have been living on
earth
 for hundreds of years, so the body of us has evolved to adapt to living conditions on
earth
. Even if we develop the science and the tools to live on other plants, it is not guaranteed that our bodies, both mentally and physically, will survive there.
For example
, through the years, our bodies adapt to the light and heat amount that it gets daily, moving to Mars, where the temperature and light is different would affect our body vitamins and minerals which will lead to other illnesses. To sum up, I believe that improving and caring about what we already have would be more reasonable and more worthy rather than taking an unknown adventure. Investing
money
 on the unknown would cost a fortune without a promising result.
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