Write a letter to the cinema manager to inform him/her that you have lost your bag in the cinema. In your letter you should: Tell exactly what happened and when - Explain where you think you left the bag - Ask the manager to help find your bag

Dear Sir/Madam, I am Tajinder Singh from Brampton, working as an assistant manager at ABC Industries. I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I left my suitcase at your cinema. To commence with, I visited your cinema hall with my friends on March 12, 2024, to watch a movie. On that day, I
also
brought a bag, which had some important documents, as I decided to go for a meeting after the movie. Unfortunately, I left those documents in the cinema hall, which is very essential for my project. Apart from that, it is a black leather suitcase with a golden handle and
also
has some cash, credit cards and my house keys. I think I left it in the auditorium of Cineplex when we were leaving the hall. I am
also
sharing movie ticket details and a photo of my suitcase; so you can locate it easily. I would appreciate your immediate attention to
this
matter. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Tajinder Singh
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Coherence & Cohesion
The letter is well-organized with a clear logical structure, but could benefit from better paragraphing, with distinct separation between the introduction, the exact details of the incident, the location where the bag might be, and the request for assistance.
Task Achievement
The task response is quite complete, yet more specific details of the lost item and any identifying features could be provided to enhance clarity and support the manager in the search.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on implementing a stronger closing paragraph, reinforcing your request and expressing hope for a positive outcome, along with providing contact information for follow-up.
Task Achievement
Consider using a tone that more fully reflects your concern about the lost item while remaining formal and polite.

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