In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write about 250 words.

In Thailand, there are many children that
lack
of education because they live in
remote
Suggestion
a remote area
remote areas
area
and
lack
of teachers so
grovernment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
provide them computers and
Internet
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the Internet
. The
first
reason that some are
Internet
can'
t
access and the
second
, less people who
lives
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live
in remote are know how to
use
the
computer
and
internet
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the internet
According to the
first
reason that some
area
which remote and
lack
of Technology so
internet
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the internet
can'
t
access.
people
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People
who live in there hardly to find who
use
wifi or
internet
so they support their children to learn about how to earn money and survive more and know how to
use
wifi and
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
things that people ignore to provide
internet
in
remote
Suggestion
a remote area
remote areas
area
so
make
engage in
do
children
lack
of knowledge and formal education. The
second
reason that less people who live in remote
area
know how to
use
the
computer
and
internet
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the internet
. Even
grovenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
provide
Suggestion
provides
technology but
Accept comma addition
technology, but
the best was
government
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the government
should do that teach them how to
use
?
to
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To
need a Teacher who can really give them some knowledge. In the
finally
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final
finals
the problem still stay right. In the other hand, people believe that children can learn by
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
using
computer
and
Intermet
a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange
internet
. Everybody call "self-study". They can learn
eveything
all things
everything
in
internet
However
, I think children need someone to teach them, to guideline them what is good or bad?
teach
Suggestion
Teach
them about critical
think
Suggestion
thinks
so Technology can'
t
do
this
duty like real people/real teacher. In conclusion, even
grovernment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
thry
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tries
try
theory
tree
to solve the problem that
childrend
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children, lack
children lack
lack
of education by using the
internet
and
computer but
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the computer, but
the computer but
computers but
a computer but
in the
reality
Suggestion
real
world, they might face the problem like-
Internet
can'
t
access in the remote
area
or hard to find people who know know to
use
it
effeciently
with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
and the best way, I still think
childrend
a young person of either sex
children
want someone to guild them.

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