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Advantages and Disadvantages of modern technology

#technology
It is true that all the industries are developed by using modern
technology
, introducing new innovations and inventions. There are so many plus and minus can be seen in modern
technology
 by proving the statement of “Every action has a reaction”.
Therefore
, I wish to discuss about the advantages and the disadvantages of modern
technology
 throughout the essay. Robots are introduced to the production lines in manufacturing industry with the idea of improving the production quantity and the productivity. Even though the main idea was successful, lots of people lost their jobs due to acquiring of human works by machines. Efficiency and the accuracy are very high in automation, but robots can only work within the given data and it does not produce new creative ideas to the process. Nuclear power and the coal power plants were established to fulfil the electricity requirement because hydro-power is limited and seasonal. Transportation was improved and horse carts were replaced by diesel powered engines
as a result
 of modern
technology
. But emission of toxic gasses at hydrocarbon burning and the nuclear residuals leads the environmental pollution as a weakness of modern
technology
. As the we discussed above, it is very clear that modern
technology
 gives us advantages as well as disadvantages too.
Therefore
, we must be knowledgeable that how to use
,
Accept space
,
where to use, when to sue new
technology
 for the better existent of the mankind and the other living
beens
a blood vessel that carries blood from the capillaries toward the heart
veins
.
Otherwise
, we all will be
vanished
expel from a community or group
banished
 from earth due to incorrect usage of modern machinery.
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