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In many countries there is a widening gap between the rich and the poor. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge and experience. Write atleast 250 words.

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Worldwide, the people have levels very rich and very poor. The main reason, because of ambiguous income for the rich.
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 are not helping the community to improve by amending the situation. The solution is getting an assistance by the rich plus the government to
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 a project which will allow works to gain income and alter their life.
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 the government should analyse and do a researches to have a clear idea about the number of non worker. From my point of view the best example the county should increase the taxes on the business man's and women's to increase the income for the country which will help to tack appropriate actions Best regards Yazan obeidat
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