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Countries should invite foreign companies to open branches in their shores.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #companies #branches #shores
Nowadays, if the
government
 wants to increase the income they have to find a support by utilizing the
country
 resources.
moreover one
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Moreover, one
Moreover one
 of the ways is inviting multinational
company
 to invest in the
country
. In
this
 essay I will share my opinion with regard to the topic.
First let's
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First, let's
 Define the reason behind the invitation for the worldwide companies so the reason is to bring big investment in the
country
 which will lead to have a lot of job opportunities for the citizens Beside will have a direct effect by exporting and importing goods in and out.
Moreover
 the
government
 will be a shareholder with 51% to jeep any foreign
company
 under the control of the
company
for example
 telecommunications
companys
an institution created to conduct business
companies
company
companions
 who give From my point of view inviting multinational
company
 its very complex because the
company
 must remove any interest to support the
company
's to invest. As well as the
government
 suppose to expect the project might be falling anytime due to any crisis or better opportunities in any other
country
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country, for
for example
 the crisis, which happened on 2008 which destroyed a lot of the business man's and women's.
Finally I
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Finally, I
 think the
government
 should always have plan B incase on any issue to survive and to accumulate good income to support the citizens.
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