Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The current state of the medical
services
in the world is very volatile. Some
countries
have less entry to medical
services
due to
their feeble economies so the
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W.H.O.
supports them to get proper entry and some
countries
have proper access to medical
services
because they have proper economic strategies.
However
, when we take the world almost all the developed
countries
have
a
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better healthcare
service
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services
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, but citizens are able to take advantage of it only through
a
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medical
covered
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benefit
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. If anyone has no entry to an allowance benefit, they will not be able to connect medical
services
with
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freedom in their mind because it would cost them an arm and a leg. As a resident of a developed country in the
middle
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east
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I have utilized the
services
of a medical coverage provider. Sometimes some of the medicines or some medical requirements are not covered through the medical coverage.
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these kinds of instances, I have paid a huge sum of money to carry out those medical
services
. So, I agree that the medical
services
which are available in some
countries
are very expensive.
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a citizen of a developing country, I have experienced free well-being
importance
as well. Even if the service quality is slightly below industry standards, people enjoy it because it doesn’t cost them financially. Some of the governments in
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developing
countries
concentrate on health
importance
by getting financial aid from developed
countries
or Non-Governmental Organizations. By doing
this
they make sure that people have access to free health
importance
, which will ultimately lead to mitigating risks of diseases and other
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issues. Concentrating on these factors, I believe that for some
countries
in the
world
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health
importance
would not be very expensive
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