We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? In this dependence on computers a good thing or should be more suspicious of their benefits?

In the technological era that we are living, computers are used for several purposes
as business,
records, police records and maps.
reality has made a life more easy,
in my view I think we are becoming addicted to
electronic device, which is even more important than the human work. If we start to depend totally from computers, perhaps our privacy will not exist, due to nowadays is very easy to get information about one person, for the reason that almost personal data are in a cloud. Actually, there are a lot of hackers who are very smart with the stole of information. So, in my
opinion thanks
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opinion, thanks
to computers today there is not privacy.
On the other hand
, I think that computers could make that a lot of people lose their jobs, since for the companies will be more cheaper have
electronic device than workers.
For instance
, every time in a newspaper
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it’s necessary have less journalists, because a computer can write itself a news. To conclude, I believe that we cannot stop the dependent on computers. In fact, almost every day we can see a new innovation in
area, the big companies as a Microsoft and Apple are competing for who is the better in
campus. Actually, today a cell phone can be considered a computer too, thanks the born of
the iPhone
, to give a solution in
topic, I think that the should exist more education about the care of data.
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